MANGA TRANSLATION

Last replied to on Thu Nov 30, 2006 01:12:05
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I have uploaded first part. You may start with translation if you like. Tomorrow second part.

(p.s. ch 23 and 24 are finally good cleaned, tomorrow textplacing

- ch 25 is already uploaded for cleaning)

mrdummy

Posted at Tue Aug 29, 2006 14:58:15
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Oops, i have placed pages under wrong group. It's now fixed, so translators can now access and read the pages. o_O'

mrdummy

Posted at Tue Aug 29, 2006 21:13:36
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Second part uploaded and chapter 28 is now completed.
Good luck with translate pages.

crusaderky

Posted at Fri Sep 01, 2006 01:23:52
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I've got serious problems editing. please fix them ASAP

http://www.mrdummy.net/mangatranslation/forum.php?forumID=8&ID=827&start=0
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Posted at Fri Sep 01, 2006 05:12:32
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translation is done. proofing can start.

Posted at Fri Sep 01, 2006 15:34:53
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p148:

"He's like totally suspicious" -> "He's like, totally suspicious"

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p149:

"But man, that really sucks" -> "But man, it really sucks."

Sounds better.

"If he hadn't of tripped me and I didn't hit my head." -> "If he hadn't tripped me and I hadn't hit my head."

"I coulda caught him and got him thrown in jail!" -> "I could've caught him and got him thrown into jail!"

"Stop spoutin' off"

I don't really think "spoutin'" fits there.

"It precisely because it was you that he knocked you out." -> "It's precisely because it was you that he knocked you out."

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p153:

"Everyone's concerning themselves about me, treating me normally, but..." -> "Everyone's concerned about me, treats me like always, but..."

I think that sounds better, but feel free to use whichever.

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p154:

"Kana has still been avoiding me." -> "Kana is still avoiding me."

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p156:

"Real from the next page to the end." -> "Read from the next page to the end."

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p157:

"They're totally conscious of each other."

'Conscious' just doesn't sound right.

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p162:

"'cause..." -> "'Cause"

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p167:

"Thats..." -> "That's..."

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p169:

"I've got a felling this guy on the cell phone is genuine." -> "I've got a feeling that the guy on the phone is genuine."

Grammatically correct.

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Also, when speech is continued in another bubble, the first letter in the other bubble(s) should not be capitalized - unless, of course, they're names or 'I' or something like that or that the sentence has already been finished with a period, question mark or exclamation mark.

Furthermore, words after '...' should not be capitalized either. Except for the above reasons.

That's it from me.

Posted at Fri Sep 01, 2006 19:17:24
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If I haven't commented on a correction, I have no problem with it.

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"I coulda caught him and got him thrown in jail!" -> "I could've caught him and got him thrown into jail!"

Stet. Keigo's speech is a little rough around the edges.

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"Stop spoutin' off"
I don't really think "spoutin'" fits there.

You could also use "Stop talkin' so big" or something similar, but nothing as strong as "STFU".

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"They're totally conscious of each other."
'Conscious' just doesn't sound right.

You're correct, but I haven't been able to think of a better English idiom. "They can't keep their eyes off each other" has the flavor, but is too emphatic.

Posted at Fri Sep 01, 2006 19:34:39
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Stet. Keigo's speech is a little rough around the edges.

Acknowledged, go with 'coulda' then, but it's still "into jail", not "in jail".

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You could also use "Stop talkin' so big" or something similar, but nothing as strong as "STFU".

Hmm, I still don't think "spoutin'" fits, but I can't think of a synonym for it...

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You're correct, but I haven't been able to think of a better English idiom. "They can't keep their eyes off each other" has the flavor, but is too emphatic.

What about "They just can't leave it be" or something similar?

Also, mind you, I'm not a proof reader, just a regular visitor. I had nothing to do, so I thought I'd go through the bubbles and report the errors I found. 'Bout time I put my English skills to use (English is my second language, Danish being my maternal).

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Posted at Sun Sep 03, 2006 10:38:28
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p. 149:

How about "Stop mouthin' off?"

p. 151:

"I've have to... Y'know..." -> "I have to... Y'know"

p. 153:

I'd suggest "Everyone's concerned about me, treats me like usual, but..."

". . . but it's somehow it's become a little stifling" -> ". . . but somehow it's become a little stifling"

p. 167:

"About the Abiko-sensei that quit..." -> "About the sensei, Abiko, who quit..."

That's more natural in English. "About Abiko-sensei, who quit..." would also work.

p. 168:

"I been strugglin' over whether to tell you this or not..." -> "I've been strugglin' over whether to tell you this or not..."

Even in the dialect, this sounds a little off to me. At least to my American ear, "I been," used in that way sounds like black vernacular, which is very weird in Japanese context.

That's my first pass. I'll look over things again when the other proofreaders apply their changes.

Posted at Sun Sep 03, 2006 13:43:09
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p. 149:

How about "Stop mouthin' off?"

Yeah, that sounds better.

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p. 151:

"I've have to... Y'know..." -> "I have to... Y'know"

How did I miss that one? That's totally correct.

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p. 153:

". . . but it's somehow it's become a little stifling" -> ". . . but somehow it's become a little stifling"

Another one I just totally missed. Also correct.

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p. 167:

"About the Abiko-sensei that quit..." -> "About the sensei, Abiko, who quit..."

That's more natural in English. "About Abiko-sensei, who quit..." would also work.

Now that you mention it, I'd say "About Abiko-sensei, who quit..." too. 'Cuz as you say yourself, it sounds much more natural.

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p. 168:

"I been strugglin' over whether to tell you this or not..." -> "I've been strugglin' over whether to tell you this or not..."

Missed that one too. I must not have been totally awake. He's right here too.

Posted at Sun Sep 10, 2006 16:24:46
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Are those corrections gonna be applied soon? I can't do it myself.

Posted at Tue Sep 12, 2006 19:28:23
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You'll discover that things don't happen fast around here.

Posted at Tue Sep 12, 2006 20:07:24
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You'll discover that things don't happen fast around here.

haha, already did way before this, but corrections were usually applied not long after they were suggested

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Posted at Wed Sep 13, 2006 03:51:01
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I was waiting for boke's comments on my corrections before I made any changes. If they're ok, I'll go ahead and make the changes.

Posted at Wed Sep 13, 2006 09:49:42
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ok.

nojay

Posted at Thu Sep 21, 2006 19:10:34
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A minor niggle, the last speech balloon (bottom left frame) of p157 where Hiromi is replying "Ha-i" to the teacher, I'd translate that as "Yessir" rather than "sorry" (gomen ne).