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mrdummy
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 Last replied to on Mon Apr 24, 2006 00:45:09
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Now you can start here discussion about translation of chapter 22.
Please wait with page cleaning comments. I have only do the quick work with leveling pages. I remove the dust, white and black points when i start with editing pages.
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Posted at Thu Mar 16, 2006 15:39:27
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LA-LA-LA-LAAA tons of fixes applied *dlin* 
p18: untranslated SFX:ぐ (I assume it translates as "glom" or "gulp", correct me if I'm wrong)
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Posted at Thu Mar 16, 2006 17:44:55
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FYI - the translating happens in two passes. Pass one is to do the rough translation. After a day or two, when the mind is fresh, it's time to do pass two to clean things up. Normally, this happens in private, but Mr. Dummy's system drags it out into the harsh public light.
In the future, please refrain from proofing until pass two is complete. I'll drop a note indicating when the translating has been completed.
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Posted at Fri Mar 17, 2006 02:13:09
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Ok, we know now the method of Boke. Then we shall wait for your signal when the second step is completed.
I know the system for readers is public. But i have some words for readers: the system has always chance for corrections and changing texts in balloons. You may read it already, if you cannot wait for the story. But if you want read good translations, then you must wait for edited pages releases.
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Posted at Fri Mar 17, 2006 23:43:16
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You're the boss 
The best IMHO would be that you upload 2-3 chapters in advance, so that translation, proofreading and editing can be done simultaneously.
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Posted at Thu Mar 23, 2006 23:03:24
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hope you're not waiting for me...
It's done. I just wanted to get a system in place for next chapter.
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Posted at Fri Mar 24, 2006 00:43:50
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"aren't there any nice girls out there for me?"
I really don't like the repetition, but I can't come out with a way to avoid it. Suggestions?
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Posted at Sat Mar 25, 2006 20:51:24
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p13: "there's no loose ends like before" I'm really not sure, but isn't it supposed to be "there are no loose ends"?
Except these two notes, proofreading is finished.
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Posted at Wed Mar 29, 2006 01:01:27
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Ok, i start with editing pages soon.
Thanks! 
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Posted at Sat Apr 01, 2006 05:23:13
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I've been kind of busy lately, and I last looked before Boke put up the second draft of the translation. Sorry; if these comments are too late, I understand. My comments are pretty minor, and you may not want to make the changes anyways.
Cover: Noticed some white spotting, but it may have been there in the original copy.
p017: "Hiromi, you some sort of old lady?" -> "Hiromi, are you some sort of old lady?"
Some people will omit the verb here, but I like it better with the verb.
p022: ". . . that you have both genitals like me?" -> ". . . that you have genitalia like me?"
Either is correct according to most modern English dictionaries, but I think the Latin plural sounds better here.
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Posted at Sat Apr 01, 2006 12:26:52
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p017: "Hiromi, you some sort of old lady?" -> "Hiromi, are you some sort of old lady?" |
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p022: ". . . that you have both genitals like me?" -> ". . . that you have genitalia like me?" |
IMHO genitalia is way too formal to be used here.
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Posted at Sun Apr 09, 2006 22:57:51
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All pages from chapter 22 are now finally cleaned. I place next day text on the pages and let see you the edited pages for preview.
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Posted at Sat Apr 15, 2006 23:05:39
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And finally the pages are now edited and extra pages added. It's now on the server, check your private message box.
And i have one comment:
The balloon on page 19, 'Stay still a minute':
Should not better like 'Stay still for a minute' ?
There are no more comments.
Oh yes, i should add the back of the book cover to the zip package right?
I can scan the full cover, but is not useful for online reading. I can put on the site as separated download. And i put also the mini posters in bigger format on the site. But first cleaning it better because the white line in the fold area.
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Posted at Sun Apr 16, 2006 01:31:48
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No issues.
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The balloon on page 19, 'Stay still a minute':
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Common in spoken English.
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Should not better like 'Stay still for a minute' ? |
Grammatically correct, but I prefer the first.
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Posted at Sun Apr 16, 2006 20:55:04
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So, is this chapter going to be released any time soon? (a little impatient is what I am  )
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Posted at Mon Apr 17, 2006 01:43:35
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So, is this chapter going to be released any time soon? (a little impatient is what I am ) |
Yes, soon. If there are no problems with edited pages, i can start the release chapter 22.
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Posted at Mon Apr 17, 2006 01:52:28
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I can't look at it before tuesday.
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Posted at Wed Apr 19, 2006 23:25:39
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I can't look at it before tuesday. |
Ouch... torrent is now started. But for my eyes, it looks good enough and no strange faults. No big worries.
Have checked the pages many times if the texts are good placed. I made little changes and should now be fine. I use every text from the online translated pages (copy paste) and see at some places the text must be reformatted because the some bubbles on the pages. I'm satisfied enough with the edited pages.  You too?
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Posted at Sat Apr 22, 2006 16:04:39
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Sorry for my absence. Shit happened.
p000 - cleaned up the right border and several black/white spots.
fixed version: http://img81.imageshack.us/img81/9539/bnfntv4ch22p0008kr.jpg
p000a - to put it bluntly... white wasn't white. not even vaguely.
fixed version: http://img177.imageshack.us/img177/5209/bnfntv4ch22p000a8yn.jpg
p000b - ehm... should I... comment it? 
serious version: http://img82.imageshack.us/img82/4991/bnfntv4ch22p000b3ge.jpg
p000c - cleaner version: http://img56.imageshack.us/img56/5720/bnfntv4ch22p000c8ob.jpg
p001 - this lil' bitchie really tested my patience. But I won. I won! I WON! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
http://img218.imageshack.us/img218/4222/bnfntv4ch22p0013xz.jpg
p005 - nothing objectionable
p006 - nothing objectionable
actual chapter - nothing objectionable.
I think this calls for a rerelease.
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Posted at Sun Apr 23, 2006 00:54:32
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Think about it, i forgot the DS credits on the first chapter page. That was stupid from me.
That makes rerelease possible now.
I put your optimized pictures in next rerelease.
Your edits is credited in first chapter page.
Torrent v2 is now started.
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Posted at Sun Apr 23, 2006 17:07:19
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Torrent v2 is now started. |
Can't see it in the download page...
http://mrdummy.net/dummysub/download.php
did you just overwrite the old one? This should not be done, since (for example) Manganews will not advertise it.
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