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mrdummy
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 Last replied to on Mon Sep 18, 2006 00:39:30
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Ok, chapter 24 is now uploaded.
It's about body examination at school... you know what it means 
Good luck with translation! 
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boke
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Posted at Mon Apr 03, 2006 20:29:23
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it's done
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mrdummy
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Posted at Tue Apr 04, 2006 00:12:22
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Thank you very much!
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Pandmir
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Posted at Tue Apr 04, 2006 17:21:43
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Wow since the last chapter, is very pleasing to see advances, really really thanks 
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crusaderky
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Posted at Tue Apr 04, 2006 22:14:18
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p45: @boke:
"I think there's no mistake... I believe it"
What is it of these two?
"I think there's no mistake... I believe in it" (strong convinction)
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"I think there's no mistake... I believe" (frail convinction)
p56: @boke: can't find "Git" in the vocabulary...
p58: @boke: "that's why I said..." in english doesn't make any meaning, and the translation for だから is "so, therefore"
except these, proofreading is complete
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Posted at Tue Apr 04, 2006 22:38:20
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"I think there's no mistake... I believe in it" (strong convinction)
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p56: @boke: can't find "Git" in the vocabulary...
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Common english expression short for "Get out of here". You can use "Scram" instead if you want.
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p58: @boke: "that's why I said..." in english doesn't make any meaning, and the translation for ??? is "so, therefore"
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It's a single sentence broken into two balloons - "That why I said [earlier] that maybe she's had a sex change". Notice the quote marker tte in the second balloon.
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Posted at Wed Apr 05, 2006 16:54:30
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Wow, nice translation. A few things I noticed that might help. They're mostly small shifts in the english to make it flow a bit more naturally, although they do make it slightly less literal. A lot of it is using "she" for "kono ko" or "ano ko" rather than "that girl", which sounds a bit strange.
P.45
"So, is that girl really a boy?"
"So, is she really a [boy/guy]?"
"I think there's no mistake... I believe it."
"I don't think I'm mistaken... I'm sure of it."
"More importantly, are you going to be okay, Midori-san?"
I think this sentence conveys something more related to the subject at hand. I'm having trouble coming up with an accurate translation, though, since it seems to be both asking about her conviction and her state of mind at the same time...
p.46
"See?"
"Hey!"
p.48
"What are the two of you doing?"
"What are you two doing?"
p.50
"If so, act more naturally!"
"So act more naturally!"
"It's okay, right?"
It's a long ne at the end, for emphasis, rather than submitting something for agreement.
Something like "It's fine!" or "It's great!" or something.
p.58
"Hey, is this girl really a guy?"
"Wait, is she really a guy?"
Good work. I'm definately looking forward to reading more.
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Posted at Wed Apr 05, 2006 19:55:18
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Thanks for taking the time to proofread.
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P.45
"So, is she really a boy?"
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no prob
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"I don't think I'm mistaken... I'm sure of it."
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much better
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"More importantly, are you going to be okay, Midori-san?"
I think this sentence conveys something more related to the subject at hand. I'm having trouble coming up with an accurate translation, though, since it seems to be both asking about her conviction and her state of mind at the same time...
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yup
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p.46
"See?"
"Hey!"
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no prob
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p.48
"What are the two of you doing?"
"What are you two doing?"
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Stet. Just prefer the flavor of the first. It's how my mom used to yell at me.
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p.50
"So act more naturally!"
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much better
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"It's okay, right?"
It's a long ne at the end, for emphasis, rather than submitting something for agreement.
Something like "It's fine!" or "It's great!" or something.
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disagree. Makoto is bringing Tomoki into the conversation.
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p.58
"Hey, is this girl really a guy?"
"Wait, is she really a guy?"
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no prob
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povidiusnaso
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Posted at Wed Apr 05, 2006 21:28:07
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I have no further comments to add.
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crusaderky
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Posted at Thu Apr 06, 2006 17:16:24
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"Hey, is this girl really a guy?"
"Wait, is she really a guy?" |
I honestly prefer the original
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Posted at Fri Apr 07, 2006 19:07:29
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"More importantly, are you going to be okay, Midori-san?"
I think this sentence conveys something more related to the subject at hand. I'm having trouble coming up with an accurate translation, though, since it seems to be both asking about her conviction and her state of mind at the same time...
yup
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I really wish I could help you think of something that worked slightly better. This is a hard line to translate...
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p.48
"What are the two of you doing?"
"What are you two doing?"
Stet. Just prefer the flavor of the first. It's how my mom used to yell at me.
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Understandable. Reading it over again, it does give the sentence a certain emphasis.
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"It's okay, right?"
It's a long ne at the end, for emphasis, rather than submitting something for agreement.
Something like "It's fine!" or "It's great!" or something.
disagree. Makoto is bringing Tomoki into the conversation.
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I suppose, it just seems a bit awkward the way it's worded now. I think you're right not to use my earlier suggestions, though. They don't really fix the awkwardness at all. Looking back on it, they probably would make things worse.
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Yeah, looking back at that, it works fine because of they way they're having a mental conversation. Nevermind about that one.
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Posted at Mon Apr 10, 2006 23:50:43
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they're having a mental conversation |
actually, in manga bubble baloons equal to whisper, AFAIK 
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Posted at Mon Sep 18, 2006 00:39:30
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The editing of chapter 24 is started. Tomorrow is ready, and when there are no problems, i can publish it.
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